Axel Stone

CHARACTER

Name: Axel Stone

Age: 18 years old Birth: 11th day of 8th month

Gender: Male

Species: Human

Symbol: Crown

Occupation: Student

Appearance: He is 5'9 and 150 lbs. He has brown eyes and hair. Wears glasses but don't let that foul you he can fight. He wears a purple coat over a gold shirt. Purple pants with a gold strip on the sides and purple shoes. Also wears purple and gold fingerless gloves. He has scares on his back.

History: His family line comes down from royalty. He is in line for a throne in a different country. His father owns one of the most well known weapons business in the world. His mother died giving birth to him. He skipped some grades for being so smart. He was kidnapped once and tortured by some bandits to get weapons from his father but killed his father instead. He taught himself how to fight and escape the bandits and lived his life as head of his family's company but also goes to school. Growing up alone no parents or friends to love him so he stays to himself. He was picked on and made fun off for being so smart. He now lives with his uncle who owns his dad's company now and runs it. For he doesn't want to own the company but to become and hunter and protect people.

Personality: He is very smart for his age. He is very  mysterious and quiet even dark sometimes. But once you get to know him he is very open and happy. Though does get sad sometimes of remembering and missing his family. He has a secret which he doesn't want people to know that he is royalty and in line for the throne in a different country. He is somewhat of a lone wolf guy until you actually get to know him and if he likes you he will talk to you. He doesn't like people getting bullied so he will help them out in a heartbeat. So once you make friends with him he will trust you more.    


Strength:  He is smart, excellent fighter, and excellent strategist. His fighting skills are top notch he is agile and quick. Also can sneak around pretty easily and quietly. Sword fighting is top notch once he gets going his blades move so fast some times people can' t keep up.

Weakness: He is sometimes very cautious about going into things with out a good or plan or his plan. He can get too focused on one thing and not see whats happening around him. If the plan is not good to him he won't like it and probably wont follow it. He is not strong so people can over power him and throw him around. Prefers to stay in close range combat he can't handle long range combat so well.

Semblance: It is a purple aura around him and can give him the ability to predict his opponent next move in battle. He can't really control when it happens it just happens and after that it uses a lot of his strength so he will be weak and tired. Since he can't control it he doesn't want to use it a whole lot on his on strength.  

WEAPON

Name: King's Blades

Primary Form: Two rapier swords and can poison with a toxin that slows down who it hits.

Secondary Form: The blades collapses and combine to make a gun barrel. The sword hilts slide into place to become the guns handles. Then they are two pistols that the person that is shot is also poisoned with a toxin that slows them down.

History: King's Blades are from Axel's great great great great great grandfather who was King of a country and had those blades made with the hardest, lightest, and most unbreakable metal in the world. It was used to slay monster, demons, dragons, and grimms. Passed down from generation to generation then was given to Axel before his father was killed and Axel took them and modified them to not only be the legendary swords but to also changed into pistols as well.

I'd like to see more detail in most sections. Semblance is the one requiring the most work, but history and personality are also pretty lacking.

Is that better Seiryuu24

I'm a little too busy to give it a full read though, but as far as substance goes it's a vast improvement. Nice job.

thanks