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PostSubject: Thorn Stradaise   Mon Nov 04, 2013 6:43 pm

Name: Thorn Stradaise

Age: 18

Gender: Female

Symbol: A halo around a red trident

Occupation: Student and practicing medic

Appearance: Thorn has pink eyes and maroon hair. She tends to wear assorted outfits. She is also 5.9. Secretly a Faunus with wolf like ears. http://www.animecharactersdatabase.com/character.php?id=6880

History: Thorn was raised in Vale by her mother. She has no siblings. She lived a very normal average day life until she wanted to attend Signal Academy. She ran away for a year to train up in the Forest of Forever Fall. She attended Signal and graduated. In the forest she learned to treat wounds and also started to begin to practice working and learning about medicines. Thorn is still on the waiting list to go to Beacon.

Personality: Thorn is caring and will do anything she can to assist her friends. If someone or something gets in her way of something extremely important she will get angry and possibly gain more aura abilities. Thorn enjoys school and strives hard to accomplish her goals. Thorn hates idiots.

Strength: Thorns lightweight weapon allows her to get around at a moderate speed. She can dodge attacks swiftly. Thorn is very knowledgeable about dust and how to use it in weapons. Her forest training allowed her to adapt to the wilderness and she is also knowledgeable of different medical terms and treatments.

Weaknesses: Thorn is weak to fire dust and weapons. She is weak to this because in her time at the forest she always had a fear for fire in the forests that could possibly end it and her. Basically any signs of fire can set off her anger. She also has little to no aura. Her aura only increases when she is very angry. Her aura gets an immediate instead of gradual jump. It allows her move swiftly and heal wounds quickly. (Her aura is also red. representing her anger)

Semblance: Thornado- Thorns semblance is a storm of thorns and pricks surrounding Thorn. It has a small radius of about 5 ft. The storm has a dark red tint .(Her aura changes from a pinkish red to a dark red when she is angered. This semblance is also one that is activated.) She can control the thorns with her aura and send them flying at opponents in batches.

The backfires of the Thornado are of the following:

1.) The thorns from the storm also affect Thorn and she will get cuts all over her body.

2.) She will faint after a certain amount of time in the storm (Her aura is drained during it and she can only be in it for about 5 minutes.)

Weapon name: Ambrosia Spike

Primary form: Ambrosia Spikes primary form is a trident powered by electric dust. Ambrosia Spike is red/black and splits in the middle to transform into its second form.

Secondary form: Ambrosia Spikes second form is a 12 gauge shotgun that shoots bullets that are formed into the shape of a prick at the tip.

Tertiary form: None

History: Thorn forged this weapon at Signal academy and has so far never left her sight. If anything were to happen to her precious Ambrosia Spike...


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PostSubject: Re: Thorn Stradaise   Mon Nov 04, 2013 8:42 pm

Hmm.

Appearance - flesh this out a little bit. Height, build, distinguishing features or styles? A little more is needed, even if only as a link or reference to a faceclaim.

Strength - How does the weapon allow her to move with speed? Is she firing shots off for inertia? Is she pole vaulting? Is its tertiary form a pogo stick? Clarify this please.

Weaknesses - How is she weak to it? What makes her more vulnerable to fire than anything else? Would other fire based attacks or abilities also have the same effect? Some more detail on the reduced aura too - how does it affect her defenses and capabilities? How does anger cause it to increase? A slow climb or a full fledged rage trigger spike?

Semblance - This needs to be redone. At the moment it seems to be more a duplicate of her personality or theme rather than an actual functioning Semblance.

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PostSubject: Re: Thorn Stradaise   Mon Nov 04, 2013 10:56 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Thorn Stradaise   Tue Nov 05, 2013 5:28 am

Strength - perhaps change the phrasing there. I know what you're going for. You want to make a point it is lightweight and not as cumbersome as some weapons out there so doesn't hamper her natural mobility.

Semblance - Still needs to be there or something along the lines of 'currently undiscovered', etc etc etc

Fix those two and it's an approval from me.

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PostSubject: Re: Thorn Stradaise   Tue Nov 05, 2013 5:58 am

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PostSubject: Re: Thorn Stradaise   Tue Nov 05, 2013 7:10 am

Approval get.

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PostSubject: Re: Thorn Stradaise   Tue Nov 05, 2013 4:10 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Thorn Stradaise   Sun Nov 10, 2013 4:14 pm

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