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PostSubject: Johanna Bach   Johanna Bach Icon_minitimeMon Mar 03, 2014 3:26 pm

CHARACTER

Name: Johanna (Jo An A) Bach – Shorted to “Jana” most of the time

Age: 19

Gender: Female

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Occupation: 3rd Year at Beacon Academy, Huntress, Professional Musician, Meastro, Painter, Actor and Athlete

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Semblance: Super Sensing: Joanne's semblance is the only reason her accuracy and reflexivity means anything. Firstly, this semblance has raised her instinct to immense levels making most of her reactions during combat completely impulsive. She has something that you could call a 6th sense for danger and her surroundings. It additionally has increased all of her other senses as well. She has enhanced hearing, vision, taste, touch and smell. But next to that, the core ability of her semblance is to increase her sensitivity to such heights for short moments, that her surroundings will appear to slow down, giving her brain much more time to react. She can slow down her perception to the point that 1 second in the real world will seem like 20 seconds to her, making her able to calmly calculate during the time she super senses. She can only supersense up to 20 seconds a time though. After that she will need a short moment to pick her super senses back up again, a time gap of around 5 seconds. This of course strains her mind extremely hard, meaning repetitive use causes headaches after a while, making her vision blurry and causing a ringing in her ears, making those senses extremely dulled, even during slowed down time. If she were to go above her limit to supersense, she could even return with trauma, internal damages to her brain or intracranial injuries.

Additional Information: Jana has, up until now, kept secret about the full potential of her semblance. There is no one who knows its true function, namely the one of slowing down her perception to give her the best coordination possible. She was able to sell it off as a simple sense enhancing semblance. Her absolutely exceptional skills in marksmanship have been described towards her gifted nature up until now. Meaning no one truly knows the complete ability of her semblance which gives the image of her abilities a great boost around the academy.

(To properly clarify this, try to think of a Spiderman's Spidey Sense as a Semblance. She can sort of sense danger and her perception of time can be slowed down. Like that. As well as the rest of her senses being enhanced.)

(Please also note that the higher she supersenses, the more straining it will be. While you of course have no reason to trust me that I will not godmod this, I can only say that I have quite the experience in rp combat fighting, and I have not created this character to be a fighter. If you deem that you can not trust me to abuse this, I will change it, but I ask a little confidence in my sense of fairness during rp.)

WEAPON

Name: Steinschloss: Das Bollverk

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Primary Form: Flintlock - Two high-powered flintlock guns with on-point accuracy of over-average size.  They fire extremely fast and reload automatically. The bullets the fire are strong enough to break walls and bend in metal. These weapons have quite the far range, up to 250 meters of accuracy, and fire with extreme speed. Next to that, these weapons are extremely sturdy, their case being able to block blades without being cut.

Secondary Form: Submachine Gun - In this mode, either of her guns will be charged with multiple shots that can be fired off rapidly. The power this brings with it is aching to that of her Railgun, but scattered on several shots. Lethal when received from point-blank range.

Tertiary Form: Railgun - One of her guns will split apart revealing a gray block that is charging with Dust. The next shot will be that of a highly powered railgun that is capable of destroying even forged metal and fires at twice the usual speed. This shot only works once and after that, her gun will need to be repaired before it is usable again.

History: This weapon bares no meaning to Jana. There is no bond to it whatsoever. It is what it is. An extension to herself, to her powers, and something that can easily be replaced, fixed and upgraded. It is her own design. Two guns that she has been upgrading from the start of her real Huntress' training. There is nothing personal about these guns. She has merely chosen them because she deems them to accustom to her fighting style the best, as well as give her semblance the greatest advantage. She of course always keeps spare parts to fix this weapon should it break or stop to function.


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PostSubject: Re: Johanna Bach   Johanna Bach Icon_minitimeMon Mar 03, 2014 3:37 pm

I hate to do this since due to the sheer amount of detail you have already, but WiPs are not allowed to be posted here. You have 24hrs from now to save your progress before it's deleted.
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PostSubject: Re: Johanna Bach   Johanna Bach Icon_minitimeMon Mar 03, 2014 3:39 pm

Just playing around with the code a bit. Gonna be done in a bit anyway. But thanks for the headsup.
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PostSubject: Re: Johanna Bach   Johanna Bach Icon_minitimeMon Mar 03, 2014 5:40 pm

'kay, no need to delete this. Not bumping since I dunno how you guys like bumping. But I'm done with this, it's completed and it's not Work In Progress anymore.

I would like information on how I could make my weapon better/more descriptive. Kind of lost muse halfway writing it. Is there anything specific I need to describe to make it a truly great weapon?
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PostSubject: Re: Johanna Bach   Johanna Bach Icon_minitimeTue Mar 04, 2014 3:45 pm

First off, wow words! That's a good thing though!

Your semblance is fine as a concept, but needs a bit more balancing, I think weaken it slightly and you'll be fine. Say, 1 real second feels like 10-25 seconds.

Your weaknesses are... Odd. There are a lot of miscellaneous weaknesses that are strictly personality based and won't show up in combat. Add a few combat centered weaknesses and you're all good!
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PostSubject: Re: Johanna Bach   Johanna Bach Icon_minitimeTue Mar 04, 2014 5:40 pm

First of all, I have edited the semblance down to have of the original time-relation. I believe that it is adequate and still feasible, as she can only hold it up to 20 seconds. Meaning the stronger she super senses, the less time available she has. Now, I understand that you are not willing to give this vague image of the ability into my hands, I still ask you to trust me.

I take my right to speak for myself and say that I have experience with rp combat and know where fairness starts and where it ends. I will not abuse it, nor do I have the intention to. This will lead to my second point.

This character is by no means a character created for combat. The idea behind her is a massive plotline that I want to unfold on this site. In other words, I hope to be able to unfold the massive personal plotline I have planned for her on the site. She is certainly not supposed to be combat-centered.

The weaknesses you describe as "miscellaneous" are a deeply enrooted part in her and give the framework of her personal philosophy that I believe I have incorporated throughout this application. They are nowhere arbitrary just to have weaknesses. I have added combative weaknesses as you asked and even payed attention to balance them so I have one more weakness than strength.

The weaknesses are all part of her character. A large part of my strengths are also merely personal strengths that bare no meaning to actual combat. So overall, I simply thought that in strengths and weaknesses belonged not only what makes her strong in combat, but also what makes her personally strong as an actual human, as that is what I am trying to create into the RWBY universe you have built up.

I hope this has given reason as to why the weaknesses are certainly not arbitrarily picked and written down out of simple brainstorming towards this character. I might be taking this too serious, but I take all my characters very serious.

I hope you excuse any impolite phrases towards you. Thankyou for looking at my application.

EDIT: In case you don't want to read that paragraph

EDITED STRENGTHS AND WEAKNESSES, EDITED SEMBLANCE
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PostSubject: Re: Johanna Bach   Johanna Bach Icon_minitimeWed Mar 05, 2014 8:05 pm

I'm going to have to agree with Snake on the semblance. As it is there is too much potential for abuse.

You want us to trust you to have the experience and discipline to play in a fair and balanced nature despite this potential. Well, unfortunately, I don't know you and I am not one to trust someone I don't know. Because we do not know you, or you play style, we have to focus on balance first and foremost. Not just for you, but for the people you will be interacting with as well.

That said, we have a section for character editing, which will allow you to make changes as your character grows. I can't say that if she starts out weaker we will allow her to be as strong as you would like, but we do allow more leeway for those who prove to be trust worthy.
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PostSubject: Re: Johanna Bach   Johanna Bach Icon_minitimeThu Mar 06, 2014 4:23 pm

Changed to 20 seconds.
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PostSubject: Re: Johanna Bach   Johanna Bach Icon_minitimeThu Mar 06, 2014 5:29 pm

Okay, that will work well enough. +1
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PostSubject: Re: Johanna Bach   Johanna Bach Icon_minitimeFri Mar 07, 2014 6:24 pm

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