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PostSubject: "Jax Gardener"   "Jax Gardener" Icon_minitimeWed Jan 01, 2014 10:57 pm

CHARACTER

Name: Was previously known as Gabriel Corey but since his legal name change is known only as Jax Gardener and tends to react loudly and/or violently to his old name.

Age:17

Gender:Male

Symbol: A green spiked gear with a crack down the center.

Occupation: Student at Beacon

Appearance: As Gabriel he was an athletically built youth with medium length black hair that streamed in the wind and a glorious white smile that was quick to cross his face. These features easily kept people from noticing as day by day the lights in his eyes were slowly dying. They saw a happy young man who gathered friends easily.

As Jax almost no one who knew Gabriel would have a chance of recognizing the once class president, top student, and captain of the soccer team. His features are squarish and harsh but handsome, perhaps even pretty in the right light.. and without his unique fashion. His black hair mostly buzzed down almost to the scalp except down the center where a three inch bright green spiked Mohawk holds court. His ears are pierced repeatedly along the edges with at least a dozen piercings each. In each hole is usually found a silver bolt through it with matching nut. His eyebrows are pierced five times with barbell piercings and one more piercing right below his bottom lip, usually a downward curved metal spike.

His body shape is shorter then most his age but he is a bit broader with muscle from exercise and much work in the forge, his skin pale from not enough time outside except for school and hunting practice. His skin accented with a myriad of tattoos. The back of his neck has the word "Defiant" written in Gothic script on it that blends into tribal swirls that spin off and then weave 'in' and 'out' of his skin as if infecting him. His chest has a heart made of gears and circuits on his chest which is 'exposed' with 'skin' peeled back from the heart displaying ribs of steel and gears instead of lungs. His arms have heavy metal lyrics going down from his shoulders in vein like patterns all the way down to his knuckles and finally on his left buttock, square in the middle is a pair of black lip prints. A clear invitation to the world.

His most common accessory besides his weapon of choice is a black sleeveless leather trench coat that hangs down to his ankles. The collar and hem of the coat are accented with green and his signature symbol is embossed on the back of the coat. His coat is usually left to flap open except for the chain which wrapped around his waist several times acts as weapon storage mount and accent Hanging on each side are forearm side cylindrical ammo drums two to a side, the weapon in it's broadsword form hands in the back. The coat is a little worse for the wear with tatters around the edges and repaired tears on the back and sides that have been stitched shut with white thread. He usually wears a white shirt under the coat, long sleeved on cold days and sleeveless on warm ones. A pair of green headphones are either on his ears or hanging on his neck and a pair of blue jeans on his legs which range from grease stained, bleach stained, stained with what you hope is red ink, or all of the above. A pair of steel toed boots complete the picture and are handy for backside kicking.

Strangely enough Jax always seems to smell of gasoline, fire, copper, and a slight sent of ozone. It doesn't matter when he last bathed it is always there.

History: Jax doesn't talk about Gabriel. Doesn't acknowledge his existence besides that of 'one who once lived'. To him the past is a foreign country with heavily guarded borders and a disproportionate response policy to invasion. That said what can be found by public record was that Gabriel Corey was the third son of the transport mogul Richard Corey, the third air. It was known that he was the top student of the private school he went to, the captain of the soccer team, and the class president... and the one day all that stopped. That person vanished and a new one seemed to take his place. Pieces changing, a Mohawk first, then piercings and tattoos as well as many uniform violations and then one day Gabriel Corey vanished and Jax Gardener appeared. He entered a hunter school on his own merit and worked his way to a scholarship at Beacon. What happened in between, what happened to change him so much is unknown to anyone but Jax himself.

Jax remembers Gabriel, a third child to a mogul who didn't need a third heir, born with two older grown brothers who didn't need a little brother to teach, born to a mother who saw him not as a son... but as a doll, a way to show off, something to brag about. He was a child born to a life where the only affection he saw was when he achieved perfection. A+ papers, a new record in gym class, a new honor from school. The only way he could feel a bit of color in his otherwise gray life, the only way to fill the emptiness he grew with was to be the perfect child and yet... and yet as months and years pasted he shriveled inside. He died on the inside a bit more each time. He felt the gap between him and others widen and the numbness take root. Becoming more and more numb till one day he woke up and found that nothing touched him. Pain... pleasure... there was nothing left for him. So that morning rather then running to school for exercise he walked but not to school but to one of his Father's trainyards. He looked down at it from a hill top and looking down saw a way out.

One quick motion in front of a train and it would end. The numbness.... everything... maybe he would even feel the impact. He smiled that smile of his and started to walk down the hill, passing through a warehouse distract on the way and there... there his life changed. There in an abandoned area he heard a scream, not a scream of pain or panic but of rebellion. He stopped and heard drums that hammered against the walls in their way, a guitar that wailed and screeched at that which would dare to stand against it, and he felt his heard beat in his chest. He stood there for many minutes just listening and then he followed the noise and found the origin of it. He found a band practicing their heavy metal routine in an old warehouse and listened. He let the music find that empty space and for once... it became full. Not of serving others... not of taking pain... but of screaming against the voice, of fighting even when there was no hope because sometimes fighting was the only thing you had. He went home hours later and before his own reflection watched light enter his eyes again as he held up his father's electric razor and gave himself his first Mohawk.

There was much screaming in the household after that. Rules were broken, he dropped out of the soccer club, turned away from the student council and his grades dropped. Piece by piece Gabriel as his fellow students knew him died and then finally one day vanished and reappeared at another school under a new name. Gabriel finished his death throes and Jax was born in his place. He wants to be a hunter now, not to protect others but he wants to open the roads to the world, to keep anything from telling him where he can and can not go. Not even monsters.

Personality: Some might call Jax brash, rude, abrasive... well they would be right. He is a man who barely can make himself hold himself to 'polite' society anymore. He has ripped and chewed on the chains that held him down for so long there are not any left to hold himself back. He will not lie to spare feelings, will not pretend to like someone to get ahead. This tends to push people away but for those few who can see past this will discover a friend who will fight an army to help them. Who will not stop, will not be turned away, will not be slowed down when he comes to your defense. That said he is still and angry, violent, and unsociable man who has more interest in metal, music, and machines then he does in people. "Ya know where ya stand wit metal, ya know when it will betray ya, when it will break, when it will hold. Ya can trust metal... people are harder."

Strength:
Metal is magic- Jax is an expert on metal, forging and knowing what it can take. This causes his weapons and items he makes to be a leap above most standard fair. He is a forgemaster far beyond his few years and takes great pride in his work.

You are in my way- Jax is a stilled and determined fighter able to use weapons of various kinds with skill and grace that seems in contrast to appearance. He will not stop until dead, will never give him, and will not be turned aside in battle.

Let go of my friend- When Jax does make a friend you could find no more loyal friend, no one who will do more to keep them safe and despite gruffness and a bit of rudeness to them he will always do what he can to help them.

Tougher then the next guy- From exercise and working the forge Jax's strength is quite high allowing him to use his weapons with each. These hours of work have also giving him a prestigious level of stamina and resilience to pain. By sheer will power again and again he has pushed himself beyond his normal limits because he has determined the only way he will stop is by his own death.

Weakness:

I will not bow- Jax will not compromise in his life choices, the path he has decided his life will take this can make him a bit blind to options sometimes that others might take.

Doesn't play well with others- expect for those few Jax call friends and even then Jax isn't the best team player, working in a group doesn't come naturally and he has a hard time following others and even harder time leading, preferring to do things his own way.

Temper Temper- Jax has a bit of a temper, he has been described as 'being permanently one second away from that point a person takes a wretch to the back of someone's head. While this is a bit of an exaggeration he does have a bit of a temper and tends to explode into action.

Not exactly a cheetah- Because of his wielding of heavy weapons and working the forge Jax's strength is high but... the side effect is lack of time or interest in agility training means he isn't exactly the fastest or most agile of fighters, he tends to have to block or turn to lessen a hit rather back flip over it. Because of how heavy weapons he also can't bring them to bear as fast as others might. While he can jump high it is not as high as most nor as graceful.


Semblance: When the adrenaline starts pumping so does Jax's aura, a odd pulsing effect that often goes with whatever music he is listening can be felt as if a wave of bass can be felt around him. It only works when his adrenaline is pumping so he often listens to heavy metal to trigger it by accelerating his heartbeat with the music, this allows him to use a semblance which bestows on him a ability much like sonar, pulses from his aura bounce off objects within a 300 feet and pour back into him giving him a clear sense of the world around him. This is not a stealthy ability letting people easily know he is there but Jax is not much one for stealth anyways.

WEAPON

Name:Chain Breaker

Primary Form: Chain Breaker usual form is a simple green broad sword with out a crossguard and with a black edge on the blade and the pommel of the sword is a metal ring that shines silver. This is more or less the travel form of the weapon. When a button on the hilt is pushed panels on the flat of the blade withdraw revealing speakers and when an mp3 player is plugged in the weapon can also be used as speakers in all three forms.

Secondary Form: When going to the second form the sword's double edged blade separates into two halves down the edge and then the top spreads apart as the middle of the blade along the flat separates halfway down the blade's flat. This piece is pushed forward greatly lengthening the blade as from within the sword's blade edged teeth are pushed out along what was once the edge of the sword. These toothed blades form a chainsaw like blade along the edge of this odd greatsword as the handle itself lengthens to give Jax a better grip on the weapon. Pulling the pommel ring on the sword causes the weapon to roar to life as the chainsaw blade spins as if seeking something to bite into.

Tertiary Form: The last form of the weapon is the ranged form of it, like the melee form it is a heavy weapon and works well in the hands of it's bearer. First the chainblade retracts back into the weapon and then the front third of the blade spreads open a bit and then slides back over the middle third, the middle third spreads open a bit and slides over the back third, then the handle shifts into a downward facing position and curls into a long pistol grip. The sliding back of the blade has revealed a three barrel rotating .50 cal machine gun barrel turning the weapon much like GAU-19 gatling gun. The ammo drums are slide into place by Jax after it shifts.

History:Jax has hand forged this weapon with his own skill and genius and takes great pride and care of his creation. Many notice it is always much much cleaner then Jax himself.


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PostSubject: Re: "Jax Gardener"   "Jax Gardener" Icon_minitimeFri Jan 03, 2014 1:06 am

It looks good, though it could use a combat weakness to balance out a bit more. "not a team player" doesn't fly as the only combat-ish weakness.
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PostSubject: Re: "Jax Gardener"   "Jax Gardener" Icon_minitimeFri Jan 03, 2014 1:29 am

First of all I kind of put a lot of thought into your profile since it's my 1st real approval so I might me a tad nit-picky.

Aside from a few typos here and there, this was a really well written profile. That said I did have a couple issues. I would prefer to see a bit more in the strengths and weaknesses. You mention that Jax is skilled and agile, but never mention strength, speed, or stamina. Based on his weapon I can assume he's moderately strong, but then I would also have to assume his speed may not be as high as a fighter that focuses on speed over strength.

Stamina is important too. How often will he be able to swing that weapon around before he starts to get tired? As he get tired how will that effect his skill. It's one thing to attack a target when you are fresh, but it's something all together different when your lungs are about to explode and all you can hear is the blood pounding in your ears.

I'm also not real sure how your semblance will work in an RP scenario. You won't be able to simply cleave through weapons at will, but if it's not intended for combat there might not be a problem.
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PostSubject: Re: "Jax Gardener"   "Jax Gardener" Icon_minitimeSun Jan 05, 2014 1:43 pm

Add some weakness, farther expanded on his capabilities in strengths so his fighting style will be a bit clearer, changed the last form of the weapon and gave him a difference Semblance. Hope fully this works for you guys.
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PostSubject: Re: "Jax Gardener"   "Jax Gardener" Icon_minitimeSun Jan 05, 2014 1:47 pm

Works for me. +1
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PostSubject: Re: "Jax Gardener"   "Jax Gardener" Icon_minitimeMon Jan 06, 2014 6:44 pm

Looks good. Approved.
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